(Try to make your introductory sentence interesting.) Here are four paragraphs about Neptune. Neptune is the 8th planet from the sun. It is also the coldest of the planets. It was discovered in 1846 and only the Voyager 2 has been able to explore it. (Closing sentence)
In 1989 this space ship (Which ship?)provided the first close up picture of this planet, and found that Neptune has rings that are barely noticeable. Neptune takes 164.8 Earth years to orbit the Sun. This means that Neptune has made one full orbit since 1846. Neptune is about 30 times farther than the sun than Earth is. (Closing Sentence?)
(Topic sentence?)The atmosphere in Neptune is made out of H2+HE. These are five of the twelve moons on Neptune, Larissa, Proteus, Neredious2002 NI, and Triton. People say Neptune has rings but were not all sure. The Gravity on Neptune is 1.13. The temperature on Neptune is, H= -200 F/ C= -320 C. (Closing sentence?)
(Topic sentence?) I think Neptune is a sort of bad planet to live on. The planet would be bad to live on because the temperatures go from low to high in a matter of hours. Another bad reason is that there is no air to breathe in. After all the bad consequences may be bad but we like it. (Closing sentence?)
You need to make sure that the sentences are in your words. You have some great information, but it is not in your voice. Work on this and resubmit it. MC
Here are 4 paragraphs deciding if Neptune is or isn’t a good planet. Neptune is the 8th planet from the sun. It is also the coldest of the planets. It was discovered in 1846 and only the Voyager 2 has been able to explore it. That is some facts on Neptune.
In 1989 the Voyager 2 provided the first close up picture of this planet, and found that Neptune has rings that are barely noticeable. Neptune takes 164.8 Earth years to orbit the Sun. This means that Neptune has made one full orbit since 1846.
Neptune is about 30 times farther than the sun than Earth is. Well those are some interesting facts that Emily.
The atmosphere in Neptune is made out of H2+HE. These are five of the twelve moons on Neptune, Larissa, Proteus, Neredious2002 NI, and Triton. People say Neptune has rings but were not all sure. The Gravity on Neptune is 1.13. The temperature on Neptune is, H= -200 F/ C= -320 C. So now lets see what Dustin has to say.
I think Neptune is a sort of bad planet to live on. The planet would be bad to live on because the temperatures go from low to high in a matter of hours. Another bad reason is that there is no air to breathe in. After all the bad consequences maybe bad but we like it.
Pluto June 19, 2006 traveling for what seemed like 70 years we finally reached the ninth planet from the sun. After running experiments we have collected the following data, the atmospheric, conditions, number of satellites, temperature, and it gravity pull.
As is commonly known it takes the Earth 24 hours to spin on its axes. The Earths trip around the sun takes 365 days. Our data will show that it takes 24 hours to spin on its axes. One trip around the sun for Pluto takes 17 years. Finally, those are the facts about Pluto. Well not all of them but most of them.
I will tell you about our adventure when we went to Pluto. We lifted of and landed on Pluto I found out the following data. The atmosphere very very cold I think it was about -235-210. My director said the gravity was about 500 less than Earths. I have one last fact; Pluto had one satellite, and one moon….. It took 17 years to get to Pluto. That is what we discovered on the planet Pluto.
Our mission is almost over but I want to tell you a few more facts about Pluto. First, there is the color. You know how Pluto is supposed to be black it is really blue. Second, Pluto will be closer to the sun. In20 years Pluto will supposedly be closer to the sun then Neptune.
June 20th, 2006 at 2:52 pm
VERY, VERY Cool!!!!I really enjoyed listening to my first podcast! The students did a great job.
LC
June 21st, 2006 at 11:45 am
(Try to make your introductory sentence interesting.) Here are four paragraphs about Neptune. Neptune is the 8th planet from the sun. It is also the coldest of the planets. It was discovered in 1846 and only the Voyager 2 has been able to explore it. (Closing sentence)
In 1989 this space ship (Which ship?)provided the first close up picture of this planet, and found that Neptune has rings that are barely noticeable. Neptune takes 164.8 Earth years to orbit the Sun. This means that Neptune has made one full orbit since 1846. Neptune is about 30 times farther than the sun than Earth is. (Closing Sentence?)
(Topic sentence?)The atmosphere in Neptune is made out of H2+HE. These are five of the twelve moons on Neptune, Larissa, Proteus, Neredious2002 NI, and Triton. People say Neptune has rings but were not all sure. The Gravity on Neptune is 1.13. The temperature on Neptune is, H= -200 F/ C= -320 C. (Closing sentence?)
(Topic sentence?) I think Neptune is a sort of bad planet to live on. The planet would be bad to live on because the temperatures go from low to high in a matter of hours. Another bad reason is that there is no air to breathe
in.After all the bad consequences may be bad but we like it. (Closing sentence?)You need to make sure that the sentences are in your words. You have some great information, but it is not in your voice. Work on this and resubmit it. MC
June 21st, 2006 at 12:13 pm
Here are 4 paragraphs deciding if Neptune is or isn’t a good planet. Neptune is the 8th planet from the sun. It is also the coldest of the planets. It was discovered in 1846 and only the Voyager 2 has been able to explore it. That is some facts on Neptune.
In 1989 the Voyager 2 provided the first close up picture of this planet, and found that Neptune has rings that are barely noticeable. Neptune takes 164.8 Earth years to orbit the Sun. This means that Neptune has made one full orbit since 1846.
Neptune is about 30 times farther than the sun than Earth is. Well those are some interesting facts that Emily.
The atmosphere in Neptune is made out of H2+HE. These are five of the twelve moons on Neptune, Larissa, Proteus, Neredious2002 NI, and Triton. People say Neptune has rings but were not all sure. The Gravity on Neptune is 1.13. The temperature on Neptune is, H= -200 F/ C= -320 C. So now lets see what Dustin has to say.
I think Neptune is a sort of bad planet to live on. The planet would be bad to live on because the temperatures go from low to high in a matter of hours. Another bad reason is that there is no air to breathe in. After all the bad consequences maybe bad but we like it.
June 21st, 2006 at 1:53 pm
Pluto
Pluto June 19, 2006 traveling for what seemed like 70 years we finally reached the ninth planet from the sun. After running experiments we have collected the following data, the atmospheric, conditions, number of satellites, temperature, and it gravity pull.
As is commonly known it takes the Earth 24 hours to spin on its axes. The Earths trip around the sun takes 365 days. Our data will show that it takes 24 hours to spin on its axes. One trip around the sun for Pluto takes 17 years. Finally, those are the facts about Pluto. Well not all of them but most of them.
I will tell you about our adventure when we went to Pluto. We lifted of and landed on Pluto I found out the following data. The atmosphere very very cold I think it was about -235-210. My director said the gravity was about 500 less than Earths. I have one last fact; Pluto had one satellite, and one moon….. It took 17 years to get to Pluto. That is what we discovered on the planet Pluto.
Our mission is almost over but I want to tell you a few more facts about Pluto. First, there is the color. You know how Pluto is supposed to be black it is really blue. Second, Pluto will be closer to the sun. In20 years Pluto will supposedly be closer to the sun then Neptune.